RE: The Black City.

Hi @fashtioluwa. Your story shares the tale of a young man wanting to find his way in the world, and is one we can all identify with. We have some feedback for you, and we hope this will help to demonstrate why it is so important to use editing tools and carefully read your stories before posting them.

The feedback is that there are some confusing sentences and errors that you would most likely find and fix, if you did a careful reading before you post. Here are a few of them, for example:

Darey had always wished for life in the city; he felt he could make more difference in the city by attending his farmer farm located on the countryside.

This sentence does not make sense. How can he make a difference in the city by attending a farm? And what is a farmer farm?

I am living for the city today," Darey said while looking at his feet because he was trying to avoid his mom facial expression.

Here, you mean "leaving," instead of "living." and it should be "his mom's facial expression."

Now that my mother's health is better, I will be returning home next week to claim my heritage.

This does not make sense, because he is writing this in a letter to his mother.

While we don't have time to provide in-depth feedback like this on every story, sometimes we point out errors like these to help writers understand the importance of reviewing their work, as it impacts the quality of the story, as well as the rewards you receive.

Please check out our article, Help for the Grammatically Challenged in our catalog of fiction writing tips for more information.

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